WALT Use descriptive language.
Ms Wilton Read us a story called The Anzac Violin, The story is about a person called Alexandra and he likes his violin and he had it with him all the time and when he went to war he brought his violin,
and the task was to make a attributes chart; See, Hear, Location, Movement & Temperature. Then we had to make a diary entry using our attributes chart this is mine.
As I lay on the ground I can feel the pain going all through my body. I can see soldiers on the ground just like me, also seeing Enemy soldiers running around me, I can hear comrades yelping for help everywhere and enemies shouting. All around me is dust dust dust making me cough and muddy grounds. There are moving bullets going past me fast that I barely see them and soldiers running past me. My temperature is burning cold and my wounds are stunning. As the war kept going I slowly started following the stars to the base. Once I got there I got treated by doctors and recovered but I was never going to go back to the cruel War ever.
Something I enjoyed was doing the attributes chart and putting all the words in the right
place,
Something I found hard was using the attributes chart to make the diary entry.
hi manuk this real cool this like mind blown i like its so detail and the spelling is really good
ReplyDeletei did the same thing as you maybe you could comment on that
maybe work on the words like some words we might not know and a little bit of spelling
ok bye manuk
kind regards tini
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